It was a movie where the story happened in a temple.
One day, a temple kid was kidnapping some animals like snakes, frogs, and fishes, and he tied them rock for making them disorder.
But, the master knew what happened, and when that kid was sleeping, master tied a big rock to him also.
So, at morning, kid asked the master why he tied the kid a rock, and master said kid should suffer the pain of the animals.
So, kid finally let the animals go, and he was also freed from big rock.
Like this situation, I also had been suffering like this long time ago.
When I was really childish, I was an expert at catching ants and killing them.
Mom said, I should stop killing them because there are also animals and they're also a part of nature.
But, I ignored my mom's words, and continued killing ants in front of my house.
But one day, when I was suffering from a cold in winter, I had a dream.
I woke up inside the ground in my dream.
I was an ant in my dream!
A lot of ants were walking in the palace of the ant.
When I saw my body, it was really dirty because of the mud.
But, the problem is, if I come to other ants, they ignored me because I killed many ants.
I really wanted to get out of this cruel dream.
But, time go far and far, dreams go far and far.
Finally I went to the situation of bring executed by the king of the ants because I killed so many ants.
I screamed and guillotine was in front of me.
Every ants says "kill him, kill him!", and I was really nervous about that.
Before I was executed by guillotine, I woke up.
I was really scary that I had a nightmare, but I also decided not to kill any animals.
Years and years later, I didn't kill any animals including ants, sworms, other small animals.
If I kill animals like that situation, I will do another nightmare!
A very exciting post! You described your nightmare well. It must have been scary. Try to put your sentences together into paragraphs instead of leaving them as separate sentences. Try to conclude by connecting your content with the beginning. You need to remind the reader that this piece is actually a response to a short clip, called 'Spring.' So you want to conclude by saying something about the film, summarize what you have been saying, and end with a emphasis. Overall, good job!
ReplyDeleteYou have some good content in your post but you need to work on the structure. The essay should be organized into introduction, body and conclusion.
ReplyDeleteYou also need to write in paragraphs. Each example is a separate paragraph in the body of the essay with a space between each paragraph.
Good luck!